My New Essay Plan (the correct one)

My Essay Plan

Paragraph One: My Introduction
Topic sentence: Many people believe that globalisation brings many impact in different aspects in life and has become a major issue around the world.

Paragraph Two: The main effects of globalization
Main Idea: How globalization effect on global life and how westernization is creating globalisation.
Topic sentence: Many countries intrigue their share especially on industries in the international market.

Paragraph Three: International trade
Main Idea: In this paragraph I would like to discuss many countries that have been touched by globalisation international markets in my study area.
Topic Sentence: It would seem natural to think that the growth of international market around the world brings gap in life of the rich and the poor or so we called inequality.

Paragraph Four: Introduction in my area, economic and international markets
Main Idea: In this paragraph I would like to discuss many countries that have been touched by globalization in economical and international markets in my study area.
Topic Sentence: From the example that gave in the last paragraph before this, it is clear that globalisation also brings impacts in the jewellery industry regard on the first issues that concern the trade worldwide.

Paragraph Five: Design and Technology
Main idea: I would like to discuss more specific about jewellery especially in design because of globalisaton.
Topic Sentence: Looking it from another aspect, which is design, globalization can create a negative effect because it erases the true cultural identity.

Paragraph Six: conclution
Topic Sentence: In conclusion, globalisation can be seen as a benefit or else bring damage to this world.